Post by amayaff on Oct 28, 2008 21:00:43 GMT -8
Hello, so this is the beginning of a story I'm writing. I'd appreciate any help on it, thank you.
Amaya sat outside her home, awaiting the bust to arive to take her to Eagle Claw High. She didn't want to go, she wanted to stay at East Ridge where her friends were. But according to her principle and parents she belonged at Eagle Claw. Why? Because she's "special". Because she has "un-natural abilities". Because she, can turn into a dragon.
Her head came up, her black locks falling out of her eyes as she did so, revealing her pretty emerald eyes. The doors swung open to reveal a fat, impatient-looking old bus driver, his bald head shining in the morning light. His sausage-like fingers tapped agaisnt the wheel as he looked up into the small mirror, waiting for her to sit down as she took a seat next to a boy who seemed busy talking with his friend in the seat in front.
"Ya, tell me about i-" the boy cut off, seeing her. Her tapped his friend, the one sitting next to her and pointed to her. Her brown eyes showing curiosity. She looked up slightly, into his tanned face, and curly blonde locks. A red football jersey hung from his shoulders. 'Intresting pair... she thought, seeing the other boy. He had black hair that hung down in his eyes, cutting the sunlight away from his crystal eyes, shining like the snake-bites on his lower lip.
that's all I have time for tonight, I'll post the rest tomorrow.
Amaya sat outside her home, awaiting the bust to arive to take her to Eagle Claw High. She didn't want to go, she wanted to stay at East Ridge where her friends were. But according to her principle and parents she belonged at Eagle Claw. Why? Because she's "special". Because she has "un-natural abilities". Because she, can turn into a dragon.
Her head came up, her black locks falling out of her eyes as she did so, revealing her pretty emerald eyes. The doors swung open to reveal a fat, impatient-looking old bus driver, his bald head shining in the morning light. His sausage-like fingers tapped agaisnt the wheel as he looked up into the small mirror, waiting for her to sit down as she took a seat next to a boy who seemed busy talking with his friend in the seat in front.
"Ya, tell me about i-" the boy cut off, seeing her. Her tapped his friend, the one sitting next to her and pointed to her. Her brown eyes showing curiosity. She looked up slightly, into his tanned face, and curly blonde locks. A red football jersey hung from his shoulders. 'Intresting pair... she thought, seeing the other boy. He had black hair that hung down in his eyes, cutting the sunlight away from his crystal eyes, shining like the snake-bites on his lower lip.
that's all I have time for tonight, I'll post the rest tomorrow.